Friday, October 23, 2015

Writing: Entering talent shows

School children many times tend to enter TV talent shows,but is that good beneficial to them or should they avoid it?In my opinion, there are both advantages and disadvantages to it.

The first advantage is that if school children take part in a talent contest and perform in front of so many people, it can increase their confidence.Moreover, if they have a hidden talent, (comma here) they might be seen by a producer or a director and that can be a very good chance for them to start a promising career.Furthermore, (comma here) true friends will be happy for them and supportive.

On the other hand, (comma)there are also some disadvantages.Firstly, they won't be able to control the fake rumours about them at school.Also, many people that they thought were their friends might be jealous of them and start calling them names and spread rumours behind their back.Finaly, all that might interfere with their studies and lessen their time to do their homework.

To sum up,there are both advantages and disadvantages regarding this issue.However, in my opinion the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because I believe that if a school child doesn't care much about the rumours and has a talent ,it's better to use and evolve it while they are still young.



1 comment:

  1. Nice ideas and paragraphs, but remember to use a variety of words. 17/20 :-)