Dear Keely,
Thanks for your e-mail. You know you can always ask me anything.
Your idea sounds really interesting, but l can understand why you are unwilling to go. Being at that school, there is a small possibility you may feel lonely, and you might become antisocial by not having friends. Another thing that should be considered is the fact that (a little too formal here for a letter to a penpal) there is a chance of the new school (we need a subject for every gerund or infinitive) not growing on you and maybenot liking it. it not being to your liking.
From the opposing point of view (this is not an essay- your writing must be informal!), it would be rewarding to be a student of this school because you will have the opportunity to have a good business/ professional future. And did you know that going to this school can be a good way to make new friends and socialize? So you never know, you might enjoy it. (bravo, this is the appropriate tone)
Overall, I think it's a good idea. If I were you, I would definitely go there at least once, just to see if you like it. But it's up to you and you should do what feels right. Let me know what you decide, and if you go, send me an e-mail tosee tell me what is your first impressions are.
Love, ('Best Wishes' would be better for a penpal)
Manolis
Bravo Manolis for your effort to use our new vocabulary and paragraph plan. Your advice is very good, too, and makes sense. Take a look at my corrections here as well as at your classmates' posts below and let me know if you understand or agree with my changes. Be careful with some essay expressions you keep using in informal contexts. This removes 'communication effect' marks from candidates.
Content 5/5
Language 3/5
Organisation 4/5
Communication effect 3/5
Total score: 15/20! That is great! Keep up the effort, talented blogger! Christina 👌👏💪
Thanks for your e-mail. You know you can always ask me anything.
Your idea sounds really interesting, but l can understand why you are unwilling to go. Being at that school, there is a small possibility you may feel lonely, and you might become antisocial by not having friends. Another thing that should be considered is the fact that (a little too formal here for a letter to a penpal) there is a chance of the new school (we need a subject for every gerund or infinitive) not growing on you and maybe
From the opposing point of view (this is not an essay- your writing must be informal!), it would be rewarding to be a student of this school because you will have the opportunity to have a good business/ professional future. And did you know that going to this school can be a good way to make new friends and socialize? So you never know, you might enjoy it. (bravo, this is the appropriate tone)
Overall, I think it's a good idea. If I were you, I would definitely go there at least once, just to see if you like it. But it's up to you and you should do what feels right. Let me know what you decide, and if you go, send me an e-mail to
Love, ('Best Wishes' would be better for a penpal)
Manolis
Bravo Manolis for your effort to use our new vocabulary and paragraph plan. Your advice is very good, too, and makes sense. Take a look at my corrections here as well as at your classmates' posts below and let me know if you understand or agree with my changes. Be careful with some essay expressions you keep using in informal contexts. This removes 'communication effect' marks from candidates.
Content 5/5
Language 3/5
Organisation 4/5
Communication effect 3/5
Total score: 15/20! That is great! Keep up the effort, talented blogger! Christina 👌👏💪
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