Informal letter

Dear Keeley,

      Thanks for your email. I hope you are doing great. It is great hearing from you. I am so happy that you asked for my advice. You know that you can always ask me anything you want.I can totally understand the difficult situation  that you are in.It is hard to make such a tough decision, COMMA HERE especially if it is going to have an effect on your future.

    

       To begin with, COMMA I can understand how hard it is for you to leave your school, as you will have to start over and make new friends. Secondly, COMMA you might find it tough to adapt be adapted, due to the fact that (a little too formal here) everything is going to be new to you.

      However, there are many benefits of going to that music high school that you might not have thought about. First of all, you are going to meet new people that are devoted to music too. Additionally, you are going to have specialist teachers that will help you not only be a better musician, COMMA but also to try out new instruments. Finally, you may end up performing in concerts and maybe that will help you lead to a career.

   

      I hope that you found my advice helpful. If  I were you, I would take this opportunity without a second thought, but it is up to you. Let me know what you decide.

                                                                                                                          Take care,

                                                                                                                          Evridiki


*Remember: always use commas after linking expressions at the beginning of the sentence.

Great piece of writing! Friendly tone and loads of B2-level expressions. 

Content 5/5
Organisation 4/5
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17/20 --> very close to 18/20!! Well done, amazing blogger! Christina 👍💕💟